Comments on: Internal Dialogue

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By: Kaye Dacus

Kaye Dacus — Mon, 19 Nov 2007 19:19:30 +0000

Patricia, it’s showing that when it’s something that could go either way, I tend to not italicize and just make it part of the deep 3rd stream of consciousness.

By: PatriciaW

PatriciaW — Mon, 19 Nov 2007 17:26:16 +0000

Kaye, why didn’t you consider the “Great” comment in the first example a direct thought? Sounded to me as though the character was talking to herself, as much as the other “red” comments did.

I think this is why it’s confusing. I do tend to talk to myself (silently) so I have to try not to overdo it in my writing.

By: Jennifer

Jennifer — Sun, 18 Nov 2007 17:37:02 +0000

I ALWAYS italicize my internal dialogue. I don’t use ‘tons’ of it thought, so it’s not like there’s italics on every page, and I write for children, and I’ve found the use of italics not to be unpopular. I don’t know…I know some think I shouldn’t others think I should. Does the writing work if I didn’t use italics, yes, but Deep POV is almost a POV shift for me and I can’t stand it when writers go back and forth so much so that you think (as a reader) that the author should have written the darn book in first person